You've never seen me in a dress,
or wearing any sort of make-up;
please be proud of me nonetheless,
Cause' sometimes i wish i never wake up
YOU've NEVer SEEN me in a DRESS,
or WEARing ANy sort of MAKE-up;
PLEAse be PROud of me NONEtheLESS,
CAUSE' SOMEtimes i wish i NEVer wake UP
Might be all wrong...:-)
ReplyDeleteRight. Now look at the CAPITALS version again. Each line should start with a stress (because this is trochaic verse) and should have another stress every other syllable.
ReplyDeleteSo...
Line 1:
Because the word 'you've' is only one syllable, this is actually an IAMBIC TETRAMETER, i.e. "you've NEVer SEEN me IN a DRESS"
Line 2:
This consists of four IAMBIC feet, with one UNSTRESSED syllable at the end, i.e. "or WEARing ANy SORT of MAKE-up"
Line 3:
This is tricky. It starts with a trochee "PLEASE be"; but then it is followed by a DUM-dee-dee (otherwise known as a DACTYL) "PROUD of me"; then you have a trochee "NONEthe"; and a catalesis "LESS" at the end. So, in total, it is a tetrameter, but with a variety of types of foot.
Line 4:
10 syllables, I agree. But the stresses are difficult to identify. It's certainly not trochaic, as that would be "CAUSE someTIMES i WISH i NEVer WAKE up" and that doesn't sound right. I would probably stress it as follows: cause SOMEtimes i WISH i NEVer wake UP. This would be IAMB (dee-DUM), ANAPEST (dee-dee-DUM), IAMB (dee-DUM), ANAPEST (dee-dee-DUM). Do you see what I mean?
So not quite there yet, but please keep trying.
Look again at everything so far (including, especially, my long post today) and see what sense you can eventually make of it all.
Don't be disheartened! :)
I thought that was gd! ... but then again im not an english teacher lol. (Not that id ever want to be) lol
ReplyDeleteGood effort.
ReplyDeleteRight now I'm just baffed...LOL
ReplyDelete:-)
wow dis is relee gd stuff!!! :P i releee lyk it
ReplyDeletemy poem is gd?? nahhhh lol urz is much betta =)
ReplyDeleteaaa urs is hevyyyy i h8 evry1 on dis blog der jus 2 smart 4 me lol
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