A vivid description, but the meter isn't there.why THIS creaTURE is SO clevERit IS pretTIer THAN aNY oTHER aNImalis SO soft AND warm LIKE leathERjust LIKE the GORGeous SUMmer FALLLine 1 is not IAMBIC (do we say these words like that?); it also only has four feet (rather than five).Line 2 is not IAMBIC either, and has 6 and a half feet!Line 3, like Line 1 is not iambic and only has four feet.Line 4 is PERFECT iambic verse (but it is only FOUR feet - rather than five).Like I've said before, re-read my posts, and my comments on other people's attempts too, and see if you can redraft it.And don't be disheartened. :)
your poem is really gd sadz =Dyou always seem to get at least one line right, i didnt even get one right =(
A vivid description, but the meter isn't there.
ReplyDeletewhy THIS creaTURE is SO clevER
it IS pretTIer THAN aNY oTHER aNImal
is SO soft AND warm LIKE leathER
just LIKE the GORGeous SUMmer FALL
Line 1 is not IAMBIC (do we say these words like that?); it also only has four feet (rather than five).
Line 2 is not IAMBIC either, and has 6 and a half feet!
Line 3, like Line 1 is not iambic and only has four feet.
Line 4 is PERFECT iambic verse (but it is only FOUR feet - rather than five).
Like I've said before, re-read my posts, and my comments on other people's attempts too, and see if you can redraft it.
And don't be disheartened. :)
your poem is really gd sadz =D
ReplyDeleteyou always seem to get at least one line right, i didnt even get one right =(