The only place I can call my home The place were I feel free to rome The place were I can be myself That belongs to no one else Some people might moan But I’m never alone My little haven No ones taken Sian’s Home
Powerful and sincere and touching - but you are not quite there with the iambic rhythm...
You are SO close though. Adding one extra word in each of your first two lines, for example, would have left both of them in iambic pentameters as required, e.g.:
the ONly PLACE that I can CALL my HOME the ONly PLACE where I feel FREE to ROAM
I have capitalised each stressed syllable to help you. Do you see what I have done?
oh that's so sweet and nice.
ReplyDeletePowerful and sincere and touching - but you are not quite there with the iambic rhythm...
ReplyDeleteYou are SO close though. Adding one extra word in each of your first two lines, for example, would have left both of them in iambic pentameters as required, e.g.:
the ONly PLACE that I can CALL my HOME
the ONly PLACE where I feel FREE to ROAM
I have capitalised each stressed syllable to help you. Do you see what I have done?