Part of me is lost-in this mad crazy world
Part of me is tossed-inside I am hurled
Part of me is forbid-from the hailstones of sin
Part of me is hid-inside my next of kin
Part of me is dead-waiting to point the blame
Part of me is ahead-of this soul waste bin
I am struggling
But I refuse all sin.
Part of me is dali- I’m utterly unique
Part of me is bashir- I have to go and leak
Part of me is Blair- I leave things in a mess
Part of me don’t care-but this you wouldn’t guess
Part of me is Kennedy- my legacy will live on
Part of me is Ingram-but id give it all to my kin
I am struggling
But I refuse all sin.
Part of me is waiting-for the ultimatum
Part of me is creating-gathering all the datum
Part of me is escaping-it doesn’t want to be here
Part of me is draping-I’ve lost all sense of steer
Part of me is rotten-waiting to hit the bin
I am struggling
But I refuse all sin.
Part of me is dealing-with the that I will die
Part of me is healing- I am not going to lie
Part of me is seeping- through the hands of faith
Part of me is weeping-I consider interfaith
Part of me is dreaming-that I will live on to tell
Part of me is meaning-to portray this life of a bin
I am struggling
But I refuse all sin
its got to the point were i have to post now since i cant find anymore errors.
ReplyDeleteThis is great! You have absorbed both Harvey's poem and my own, and produced an excellent version of your own. You have done really well with lots of your rhymes - mid- and end-line (even if you overuse the bin/sin rhyme). I like the way your have built various celebrities into the second stanza, like I did, and your motif is very effective too. Well done!
ReplyDeletethanks sir, the reason why i only used bin and sin is that i couldnt find a way in which to adapt kin into a sentance or lynn or pin ect.
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