Why did this happen?The sudden lost of love he had for me.Everything was working fine until his heart fell out of place.What was this about? What did I really do? I'm lost without you! I was happy, you was happy. It's strange to know that before, we made love and we made jokes and had our fun. All of that change because of you.You have slaughtered our past and ended our dreams of the future.
Remember the days when you was unhappy,sad, distraught to know the fact that I was unhappy and sad.The first few days of our relationship was tremendous! The way you use to tell me you loved me and how it was love at first siaght. The second month of our relationship when you got jelous of certain things. When I used to flirt and enjoy the company of other people.
It has now come to my senses that It was not ment to be but yet we had good and bad times. We went through thick and thin,soft and hard.When we used to get annoyed with eachother when one could'nt get their own way. I got very restfull of the arguements that we had, or maybe was it that? Is that the reason why your leaving me? I ask these many questions as I am confused and can not understand why you made this decision.
My tears of sadness over flows my eye lids like spring fresh water over flows mountains. I cry emotionally, this is hard to take in. Why did this happen to me? I ask you and no form of comment has been said, but the sound of wind fulfills the atmosphere. Whats goin to happen next? I move somewhere start again and live life like this has never happened!
Hello,
ReplyDeleteI like the confrontational nature of the piece, the assertion behind the language that asks the reader directly to engage with it. I see this in the first line which is a question, 'Why did this happen?' It has the quality of a monologue about it or a modern day soliloquy...
I think the past as a physical presence is conveyed very successfully, 'You have slaughtered our past and ended our dreams of the future.' I think the idea of the past having a life of its own is powerfully displayed here.
I like the emotional contrasts within the text - the matter-of-fact nature of certain sentences against those charged with emotion.
Perhaps the piece could be condensed further? With some further editing the emotions explored might be further illuminated.
Thanks!
Liz