Sometimes I reconsider my life,
Wondering if things will ever be.
It cuts you in pieces (It's a knife!)
Is life crazy or it is just me?
SOMEtimes I reCONsider MY LIFE.
WONdering IF things will ever BE.
It cuts you in PIEces (It's a KNIFE!)
IS life CRAzy OR is IT just ME?
This is really getiin annoyin noww :(
ReplyDeletei think ive messed up somewhere here...
still tried though :)
better than last tym?
Almost there... :)
ReplyDeleteLine 1: it's "REconSIDer" and this would break the trochees :(
Line 2: Perfect!!! (although your 'capitals' version is a bit off target) - WONdeRING if THINGS will EVer BE
Line 3: "IT cuts YOU" - this doesn't sound right. "it CUTS you" is better, but, again, breaks the trochees
Line 4: Perfect!!!
So 50% there... :)
I really like the poem too, although I would probably have written "LIKE a knife"...
I LUVVVV DIS POEM, IT WAS NANG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteSERIOUSLY
lol thankiez teletubbiez!!! :P
ReplyDeletelol thx sir n i did right like a knife b4 but for sum weird reason i changed it lol