Thursday, 17 May 2007

Sugadust

Sometimes I reconsider my life,
Wondering if things will ever be.
It cuts you in pieces (It's a knife!)
Is life crazy or it is just me?

SOMEtimes I reCONsider MY LIFE.
WONdering IF things will ever BE.
It cuts you in PIEces (It's a KNIFE!)
IS life CRAzy OR is IT just ME?
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4 comments:

  1. sugadust17 May 2007 at 07:50

    This is really getiin annoyin noww :(

    i think ive messed up somewhere here...

    still tried though :)

    better than last tym?

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  2. englishguru17 May 2007 at 09:32

    Almost there... :)

    Line 1: it's "REconSIDer" and this would break the trochees :(

    Line 2: Perfect!!! (although your 'capitals' version is a bit off target) - WONdeRING if THINGS will EVer BE

    Line 3: "IT cuts YOU" - this doesn't sound right. "it CUTS you" is better, but, again, breaks the trochees

    Line 4: Perfect!!!

    So 50% there... :)

    I really like the poem too, although I would probably have written "LIKE a knife"...

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  3. TeleTubbiez17 May 2007 at 10:33

    I LUVVVV DIS POEM, IT WAS NANG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    SERIOUSLY

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  4. sugadust17 May 2007 at 13:39

    lol thankiez teletubbiez!!! :P
    lol thx sir n i did right like a knife b4 but for sum weird reason i changed it lol

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