that eerie sound which sooths the countries ears the farmer's joy reflected in his hands reluctantly the baby looks the shears it contemplates the fact that it's a lamb
Perfect iambic pentameter from start to finish. Well done!
I like the juxtaposition of "eerie" and "sooths" too. (Was that intentional?)
However, I am not sure that line 3 works, purely because you cannot use the verb "look" transitively (i.e. without a preposition). Do you see what I mean?
(And please don't forget the punctuation - unless you are deliberately leaving it out, that is...)
Thanks sir! That juxtaposition was more of a thing to do with my feeling towards the aesthetic of the poem. the whole 'look' thing was just me wanting to get things done and an outcome of my frustration.
Perfect iambic pentameter from start to finish. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI like the juxtaposition of "eerie" and "sooths" too. (Was that intentional?)
However, I am not sure that line 3 works, purely because you cannot use the verb "look" transitively (i.e. without a preposition). Do you see what I mean?
(And please don't forget the punctuation - unless you are deliberately leaving it out, that is...)
Thanks sir!
ReplyDeleteThat juxtaposition was more of a thing to do with my feeling towards the aesthetic of the poem.
the
whole 'look' thing was just me wanting to get things done and an outcome of my frustration.
thanks again sir,