In the deepest blue his watchful eye stares, A swish of his tail, he remains hidden, we wait while he prepares for the attack, this swift and hungry beast awaits our blood.
You didn't need the capitals for Task 3. However, if you had done them, you would have realised where your iambic rhythm went wrong. Say it like this and see where the words sound strange:
in THE deepEST blue HIS watchFUL eye STARES a SWISH of HIS tail HE reMAINS hidDEN we WAIT while HE prePARES for THE attACK this SWIFT and HUNgry BEAST aWAITS our BLOOD
Do you see where it sounds funny? (e.g. deepEST, watchFUL, hidDEN)
Your last two lines are perfect iambically though, so well done!
*probably
ReplyDeletei still don't get this u know, can you show me where i went wrong (even though it was everywhere) =)
ReplyDeleteomdzz i didnt even make it rhyme noooo i forgot!!!
ReplyDeletelool i was just about to ask wheres the rhymes...& and u 4got to do the capital thingy...just to let ya know
ReplyDelete:-)
lol ye but i swear you dont need that for the third task?!?
ReplyDeleteYou didn't need the capitals for Task 3. However, if you had done them, you would have realised where your iambic rhythm went wrong. Say it like this and see where the words sound strange:
ReplyDeletein THE deepEST blue HIS watchFUL eye STARES
a SWISH of HIS tail HE reMAINS hidDEN
we WAIT while HE prePARES for THE attACK
this SWIFT and HUNgry BEAST aWAITS our BLOOD
Do you see where it sounds funny? (e.g. deepEST, watchFUL, hidDEN)
Your last two lines are perfect iambically though, so well done!