i dont know sir, i think i got it, but if i didnt, i need you to clarify it for me at school. i still gave it a shot.
A great attempt: well done! I'm so glad you gave it a shot, and you've produced a fun and creative animal poem.Line 1 = is a perfect iambic pentameter.As for the rest, you would need to rewrite it slightly to sustain the IAMBS, e.g.You LOVE the SIGHT of RED, deLIGHTful BLOODBut WHEN a ZEBra FALLS beNEATH my STEALTHThat RED stuff COMES toWARDS me IN a FLOOD.Not a great poem of mine - yours is in many ways much better - but see how mine has managed to keep to the iambic rhythm...Ask me in school if you need further clarification.
ye u shud re do urs ye but use sirs example but change some of the words to make it better.anywayss its gud :DDDD
congratz fattydat was good!! :)
i dont know sir, i think i got it, but if i didnt, i need you to clarify it for me at school. i still gave it a shot.
ReplyDeleteA great attempt: well done! I'm so glad you gave it a shot, and you've produced a fun and creative animal poem.
ReplyDeleteLine 1 = is a perfect iambic pentameter.
As for the rest, you would need to rewrite it slightly to sustain the IAMBS, e.g.
You LOVE the SIGHT of RED, deLIGHTful BLOOD
But WHEN a ZEBra FALLS beNEATH my STEALTH
That RED stuff COMES toWARDS me IN a FLOOD.
Not a great poem of mine - yours is in many ways much better - but see how mine has managed to keep to the iambic rhythm...
Ask me in school if you need further clarification.
ye u shud re do urs ye but use sirs example but change some of the words to make it better.anywayss its gud :DDDD
ReplyDeletecongratz fatty
ReplyDeletedat was good!!
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