Saturday, 16 June 2007

you betrayed me but i'm ok

you stole my heart right from my chest
told me you'd cherish it
oh how naive i must have been
for now my heart you've split
we used to be joined at the hip
like two peas in a pod
but now i can't stand to be seen
with such a selfish sod

3 comments:

  1. thats meant to be can't instead of can,t by the way lol

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  2. Mostly excellent! Really impressive.

    However, pedantic as I am, I would query the following lines:

    Line 2: sounds like the stress would have fallen more naturally on "told" than on "me".
    Line 5: having the stress on "at" sounds a little awkward.

    But they do not really detract from what is an excellent achievement. Well done! :)

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