Part of me is dreaming-for one day in the light
Part of me is wanting-to study till the night
Part of me is wholesome-full of brain and thoughts
Part of me is lonesome-somehow too distraught
Part of me is timeless-watching yesterday
Part of me is lifeless-a soul that's gone astray
Part of me is hidden-behind a heart too gentle
Part of me's forbidden-
But most of me's sentimental.
Part of me is cold-like a tempest on it's way
Part of me unfolds-like one of Shakespeare's plays
Part of me is music-a bird that longs to sing
Part of me is hectic-an artist and her things
Part of me acts royal-one bossy boots at large
Part of me is loyal-I work at free of charge
Part of me remains-in each heart fundemental
Part of me complains-
But most of me's still sentimental.
Part of me's untrue-the lies they weave together
Part of me just knew-the guilt's unlike a feather
Part of me is great-everyone seems to know
Part of me is hate-the something that is 'so?'
Part of me deserves-the love I get day in
Part of me preserves-the love I get day out.
Parts of me believe-every day is crucial
Parts of me disbelieve..-
That I am sentimental.
I hope it gives an idea of myself.
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Most people should agree.
This is phenomenal - especially the first two stanzas. Your metaphors and similes are strikingly original and, at times, startlingly provocative. And your rhythm and meter are spot on too. This really is a very strong end to a very strong term's efforts on wordvoodoo. Very well done! :)
ReplyDeleteI am bound to set a target though - otherwise I wouldn't be me! :) Have a look at the third stanza and see if you can figure out what, in my opinion, make the other two that little bit more impressive.
Again, however, well done!
Thankyou!
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And, I understand sir.
Maybe it's just a hint of what's to come next year.
I agree. It's a target for me to set. Aim my writing at a much higher and profound way.
I'll try my best! ^^