I’m with you like a dog and its fleas
I’m with you like fish, chips and mushy peas
I’m with you like Macarthur and the seven seas
Even though she’s 31
And that’s her idea of fun
I’m with you like flies and manure
I’m with you like a Frenchman and his bonjour
I’m with you like an illness and its cure.
Even though that’s a lie
Because I cant make you die
I’m with you like glitter and his obsession
I’m with you like a gypsy and their possessions
I’m with you like a murderer and his aggression.
I’m with YOU.
I need you like a flower needs light
I need like a drunkard needs a fight
I need you like wind needs a kite
Just like me it’s found what its came for
Except I don’t want wind, I want more!
I need you like an America needs cheese
I need you like thank you needs please!
I need you like a bully needs to tease
Except I’m not that violent
I’m just more silent
I need you like London needs its eye
I need you like a bird needs to fly
I need you like criminals need to lie
I need YOU.
I love you like the flea that sucked thee and me
I love you like a dog loves a tree…
I love you like the day Alan Johnston was set free
Except I’m no captive
If anything I’m more adaptive
I love you like man loves his dog
I love you like mr.s loves his blogs
I love you like exlax loves a bog
Except I’m none of the above
I’m just curious about love
I love you like troops love their force
I love you like Dettori loves his horse
I love you like junkies do their source
I love YOU.
sorry about the lateness my computer was down, but now behold the return of the carlsberger!lol
ReplyDeleteive just spotted a spelling mistake, its meant to be johnston
ReplyDeleteWow,loved it and loved it even more!! :)
ReplyDeleteWell done! and keep up your great work.
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omg i loved your poem it was sooo good and your similies were totally unique, i liked it so much i re-read it three times in a row !!!
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
thanks for all the good comments guys, i appriciate them.
ReplyDeleteThis is incredible. Really, really clever - with every simile (and every rhyme) fresh, powerful and highly effective. This is very sophisticated and advanced poetry - and probably unique in referencing John Donne in a poem by a Year 9!
ReplyDeleteMy favourite simile? Far too many to mention, but above all: the Donne reference, and the three lines about the illness and its cure. Oh, and the reference to me too!!! :)
Very well done, carlsberger. You are truly a force to be reckoned with.