Atul
Sensitive inside
Strong with mother sad with dad
Playfulness he lacks
Eeshwar
Rythme is his dance
Mighty fist but weak in head
Has good bu false heart
Lopa
Mind is in the past
Worries about groom and bride
She's sick with husband
Jai
Hopless romantic
Chats up Vina with some pride
Gifts will make them stay
Vina
Confused about men
Will she be a loyal wife
Wants more from her groom
Laxman
Protective father
Wants his little girl back home
Scared of her choices
Lata
Bigmouth with her voice
Thinks she can say anything
Jealous of her child
You have risen well to the haiku challenge, with the right number of syllables every time, and you also manage that tricky 'theme change' between lines 2 and 3 of each one.
ReplyDeleteOne or two lines read a little awkwardly (e.g. "has good but false heart") but most get right to the heart of what makes the character tick.
Well done!
(As for your spellings, do remember that, even once you have posted something, you can still go back and edit it. Just log in to your Dashboard and edit posts from there.)
Thanks Sir I'll have another look at it again.
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Annonomus
I found this one quite tricky
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