Atul dutt
O why should I stay?
When my family’s a mess-
Tradition is fake.
Eeshwar dutt
Why do I still bother
When my attempts are pointless-
When no one conceives.
lata dutt
with my useless spouse
and my sons useless marraige
incompatance reigns.
Jai dutt
Sidelined for Atul
And his beautiful bride vina-
I was left stranded.
Laxman Patel
It’s for her own good
I tell myself when doubtful-
Sometimes I am lost.
Lopa dutt
When it all goes wrong
A mothers hand will be there-
There for its dearest.
Vina Patel
Overwhelmed by names,
Forced where I shouldn’t belong-
Tradition takes toll.
Apart from Eeshwar (Line 1) and Jai (Line 2), you're spot on with your syllables, and you get to the crux of many of the characters too. I especially like Line 3 of Laxman, which is wonderfully poignant and very telling about what makes him tick.
ReplyDeleteWhere is Lata Patel though?
fair point sir, should i post as a redraft or just ad on my original post?
ReplyDeleteI would just edit the post, Carl, but it's up to you...
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