my struggle with life can be divine
Why am I tabooed by my mad life?
When my heart that beats within is fine,
No thing can stop me when I’ve got life.
*MY struGGLE with LIFE can BE diVINE
*WHY am I taBOOED by MY mad LIFE?
*WHEN my HEART that BEATS withIN is FINE
*NO thing CAN stop ME when IVE got LIFE
I hope this is better lol
ReplyDeletep.s. sir i thought the podcast was really helpful although i found it strange hearing your voice outside the classroom lol
Your first line is still not quite there.
ReplyDeleteSay the word STRUGGLE to yourself. How do you say it?
struGGLE?
STRUggle?
Your poem uses the first pronunciation.
It needs to use the second.
Email me if you like... :)
I like da poem but da last line is scary..isn't NO thing one word...like Nothing
ReplyDeletei think its good =)
ReplyDeleteBut like teletubbies sed, isnt No thing the same as nothing?
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