people never seem to notice me
sometimes hidden never there
open up and you may even see
to find a child like me is very rare
PEOple NEver SEEM to NOTice Me
SOMEtimes HIDDen MAYbe NEver THERE
Open UP and YOU may EVEN SEE
TO find A child LIKE me IS veRY rare
I no i gt the second bit wrong but i tried lol
Your first three lines demonstrate PERFECT trochaic meter. Congratulations!
ReplyDeleteLine 4, however, doesn't quite work. The natural stressed almost all fall outside the trochees, and you have 10 syllables rather than the 9 required of a 4-trochee/1-catalesis line...
ALMOST there though...
P.S. I've sorted out the second bit for you. :)
woo hoo i finally gt it rite
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