Wednesday, 29 August 2007

A Ballad of Time

Is it time that may choose what we do now,
For it runs on that very fine line?
Have you questioned the life that you fend for today,
Or do you lead this life just with signs?

With my hand on my watch I stare timing,
Those small seconds as breath leaves her lungs.
As those strangers pass by mouths ajar and appalled,
A girl only fifteen had died young.

How could days bring such hell in between lives so gracious?
It is fate that shows signs that should warn.
Should our lives be mixed up like ideas in dreams,
Should our deaths seem a shock or adorn?

See that moving red image which swifts past your eyes now,
Who'd of known what that haste could escort?
In that moment of chance his bike crossed it's vast path,
What you thought was a game's none the sort.

It's time the clock won it's last victim.
Time I walked on that day to commit,
Towards a point onwards where nothing exists,
I have walked to a place where times sit.

3 comments:

  1. There's a meaning behind everything I write.
    This one has a strong one since I've taken to heart everything that has happend in the last few weeks. -pokes news-
    ^^
    Hope you all see it.

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  2. Wow,your ballad was really touching.It had great meaning and the style and language used really draws you in.Keep up the good work.

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  3. Apart from the first line of Stanzas 3 and 4, the rhythm of this ballad is near perfect - and that is no small achievement: well done!

    As for the story, it is quite amazing: like all the best stories, it makes you WORK at it before the meaning slips into place, using metaphor and subtle description to impressive effect. Well done!

    If I were being really picky, I would question your use of the word "adorn" though, as it seems more a slave to your rhyme than anything else...

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