I hate you like Damien hated Church
I hate you like new clothes hates a smirch
I hate you like a slacker hates research
Because they’re a lazy Sod
Who responds with an unsure nod.
I hate you like Hippies’ hate war
I hate you like Bailiffs hate a door
I hate you like Mercutio Je’deste amour
Even though he was there for his mate
But the conclusion was the work of fate
I hate you like flowers hate the winter
I hate you like a finger hates a splinter
I hate you like the type writer hates the printer
For taking away his work!
The Printer Looks back with an evil smirk.
HOWEVER…
I love you like Branson loves success
I love you like Mr Muscle loves a mess
I love you like a Geek loves chess
To show off his inhuman skills
God knows, he’s probably popping pills
I love you like Michael just LOVESS kids
I love you like Race cars love skids
I love you like Ebay loves Bids
So it can remain rich
And not in a cyber ditch
I love you like Shakespeare loved to write
I love you like the stars love the night
I love you like the breeze loves the kite
So it can Waltz in the air
Without any care
I need you like sound needs vibration
I need you like a Buddhist needs relaxation
I need you like a patriarch loves his nation
And who is overwhelmed with pride
And will gladly provide
I need you like a baby needs its sleep
I need you like a mourner needs to weep
I need you like a Sheppard needs his sheep
He keep his life afloat
Like a bright red blow up boat
I need you like a priest needs his prayer
I need you like Repunzel needed her hair
I need you like a patient needs care
To help them on their way
To live another day
I miss you like the desert misses the rain
I miss you like an alcoholic misses Champagne
I miss you like a Rehab patient misses Cocaine
The only thing he only needs
To help him through his grieves
I miss you like the Dr misses Rose
I miss you like the homeless miss warm clothes
I miss you like Liza misses her shows
For now she’s long gone
But a voice in a song
I miss you like Beethoven missed sweet sound
I miss you like a child misses the fairground
I miss you like Satan misses the Hell-hound
For evil is unleashed
And is a vicious beast
* cupids_ (was a mistake) lool
ReplyDeletecupids_i luuuurved all of your originality and imagination in this poem they made me stop and think "OHHH YEEAAHH !!" as well as laugh (as usual)
ReplyDeleteYOUR THE TALENTED ONE !!
luv ya xx
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ReplyDeleteMy response to this is mixed. (Don't worry though - and read on...)
ReplyDeleteI am not sure about each of the couplets following each trimeter (i.e. Lines 4/5, 9/10 etc.) - largely because the rhymes often feel a little forced, and the effect on the reader, therefore, weakened. Have a look at them and see if you see what I mean.
But as for the trimeters (and I mean every SINGLE one), they are witty, complex, dark/funny (at the same time), original and immensely impressive. You have an expert knack at finding a fresh and new way of expressing yourself, and your trimeters are not only completely cliche-free, but they flow naturally too in their rhythm and their rhyme. My favourites? Too many to mention, to be honest. But if I must, probably:
"like Bailiffs hate a door"
"like the breeze loves the kite"
"like Rapunzel needed her hair"
Oh, and "like Michael just LOVES kids"
Fantastic stuff - and SO much of it.
If any don't work quite as well, I think the Mercutio one doesn't quite work; and I am clearly too ignorant to understand the ones about Rose and Liza. Enlighten me?
Well done, chex - this is an epic effort, with a great deal of success. Well done! :)