You’re the only man who killed my heart
You broke my fragile heart yet again
But still my endless love pounds for you
It was you who betrayed me your insane!
You deserve to die; why tell a lie?
You broke my heart thinking you’ve won
You played with my feeling thinking your big!
But you didn’t think the game had only just began
The sentiments are great and heartfelt - but you haven't followed the structure/meter I gave you at all. :(
ReplyDeleteSee if you can rework it, once you've looked at my instructions again?