Monday, 11 June 2007

Betrayal

Betrayal is unimaginable;
yet I went through it all.
All the pain that you put me through,
my pain dented the wall.
He made me feel like total crap,
and yet I got punished.
How could I be so bloody stupid?
At least now we’re finished!

4 comments:

  1. Sorry sir i was happy 2day so i decided to just do the task :D

    ReplyDelete
  2. its all wrong because i think i understand that iambic thingy now

    ReplyDelete
  3. Powerful poem, but the iambic rhythm is not quite there. You say you understand where you went wrong? How about giving it another try/a second draft then? :)

    ReplyDelete