"if you wake in a room of blood
dont worry ,your just lost in my heart"
this is what you once told me before
but now betrayal has left us apart
together we were kentucky and chicken
but you left me for the fatty fries
now you become chicken and chips
and again my life is full of lies
I really liked the way you tried to explore your trademark chicken and chips metaphor (although I think it perhaps worked better in your PAINTING poem). That said, I especially like Line 6: FANTASTIC!
ReplyDeleteAs for the iambic rhythm, however, you have not managed my instructions in any of the lines. Feel free to ask me again about all this in lessons if it is causing you strife?