Cold eyes blink through the dirty mirror
Curse this world as I slam my fist
Death is always a step nearer
How do I continue to exist?
COLD eyes BLINK through the DIRty MIrror
CURSE this WORLD as I SLAM my FIST
Death is ALways a step NEARer
HOW do I CONtinue to EXIST?
Again, close at times (and it goes without saying that the sentiment is powerful, heartfelt stuff), but look long and hard and trace whether each line truly is stressed as follows: DUM-dee DUM-dee DUM-dee DUM-dee DUM
ReplyDeleteLine 1 = DUM-dee DUM-dee-dee DUM-dee DUM-dee
Line 2 = DUM-dee DUM-dee-dee DUM-dee DUM
Line 3 = DUM-dee DUM-dee-dee DUM DUM-dee
Line 4 = DUM-dee DUM-dee DUM-dee DUM-dee DUM
To fit my rhythm, you would have needed something like:
Cold eyes blink behind the dirty glass
Curse this world and slam this angry fist
Do you see what I mean?