He looked down at his shoes polished within an inch of perfection,which were soon to be ruined by the blood of terrorists,
unworthy of gracing the imported leather which gleamed with superiority.
"in the name of their god they systematically brought down the west."
This war with the "Its". He called it that.
He hesitated to think of any of them as midly human. Of course,
these weren't entirely his own concepts, the the colonel was a very charismatic man.
How else was he supposed to know about the situation,
he was barely on the seven twenty seven plane to basra.
IM really sorry if this is too oblique. If you dont get what its about just ask.
ReplyDelete101 words (but only because of a typo in your penultimate sentence - be careful) and 150 syllables. Well done!
ReplyDeleteAlso, I particularly like your ending, which resolves the preceding tension and suspense with considerable skill.
I also like the metaphor in your very effective opening sentence about his shoes! :) (Although there is room for much more imagery elsewhere too...)
Not sure about some of your punctuation though: no capital at the start of sentence 2; and your last sentence should surely be TWO sentences, the first ending in a question mark.
P.S. Did you mean 'midly' or 'mildly'?