Friday, 26 October 2007

Need,love and hate

I need you like Tom needs Jerry.
I need you like Woolwich needs a ferry.
I need you like a baby needs jelly
sweet and tasty good for a childs party.
Like a bird which needs a cage.
I need you like icecream needs a cone.
I need you like B.T needs a phone.
I need you like an old person needs to moan
to show he can get his own way.
Like potatoes need mud.
I need you like a bath needs foam.
Like vagrant needs a home.
Like a movie star needs a comb.
I need you.

I hate you like dogs hate cats.
I hate you like people hate bats.
I hate you like a footballer hates saturated fats,
burgers and chips won't help in the ninety minutes.
Like children hate vegetables.
I hate you like a book with no pages.
I hate you like a hard worker with low wages.
I hate you like animals in cages
nowhere to run about free.
Like old people hate computers.
I hate you like hope without a spark.
I hate you like an angry dogs bark.
I hate you like being left in the dark.
I hate you.

I love you like a man who loves 'burger king'
I love you like a bell with a loud ding.
I love you the way gollum loves the ring
with a simple my precious.
Like a child who loves sweets.
I love you like when a boy gets a dog.
I love you like when an athlete comes first in a jog.
I love you like a thick and dark fog
and I know that i'll always be searching for you.
Like a dog who loves a bone.
I love you like monkey loves a vine.
I love you when we go to dine.
I love you so much i know it will be fine.
I love you.

2 comments:

  1. What a fantastic collection of similes! "like Woolwich needs a ferry" "like an old person needs to moan" Fantastic. :)

    The second stanza is, perhaps, not quite so strong - largely because your similes lose the word "hate" after line three, which comes across slightly awry. Similarly, Stanza 3 is strongest when your similes contain the main verb too.

    "like gollum loves the ring" What a great simile!

    The only other comment I would make is regarding your rhyme scheme. It is often excellent - although it disappears temporarily in your shorter lines, which is a shame. However, to sustain it throughout is a very difficult thing to ask - and, all in all, this is an impressive first entry to the BLOG. Well done!

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