I need you like the flowers need rain,
I want you like an emo kid wants pain
Just for the attention and drama.
I need you like the stars need a sky,
I want you like an argument wants a lie
Just to strike back at good old karma.
I miss you like gravity would miss the earth,
I love you like a mother who has just given birth
I need you like a hole needs to be deep,
I want you like a frog wants to leap
So it doesnt stand out from the crowd.
I need you like a river needs a lake,
I want you like a fat kid wants cake
And isnt his pompous mother proud.
I miss you like a nightmare would miss its prey,
I love you like a needle loves to get lost in hay.
I need you like a cream needs dry skin,
I want you like an athlete wants to win
And doesnt even mind about getting caught cheating.
I need you like a parent needs control,
I want you, like a gambler on a roll
Who has forgotten about his terribly important meeting.
I miss you like two lovers that never met,
I love you like Romeo loved his Juliet.
This is, quite simply, amazing. Wow!
ReplyDeleteNot only have you concocted a wholly original and impressive collection of fresh similes, but you have also designed a rhyme and meter all of your own - and it is sophisticated and rigidly adhered to as well. And, like the best poetry, yours is, at times, either profoundly stark or heartwarmingly positive.
Brilliant. :)
P.S. Being picky and annoying, I have corrected the two or three minor spelling errors. Don't you just HATE English teachers!
HAA no sir no one could ever hate you [=
ReplyDeleteAnd thank you xD
I completely agree with EG.I think that this poem is amazing ad above all original.
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