Words shall be embedded within a script, puppets at my doing.
What shall come of my enthralling narration? Trapped inside the weird locked depths of my mind.
Should my leading lady be swept away by my champion?
Or should my corrupt antihero be the sole lover?
I, surrounded by images moving and growing. Pacing themselves for this time; the prodigious or fearful termination that will come to them. Only through my grasp.
Here begins the story that shall entrust the thought of novelists surrounding me. Here begins the fathomless pit where nothing but my imagination and hand are at one.
What shall come of my enthralling narration? Trapped inside the weird locked depths of my mind.
Should my leading lady be swept away by my champion?
Or should my corrupt antihero be the sole lover?
I, surrounded by images moving and growing. Pacing themselves for this time; the prodigious or fearful termination that will come to them. Only through my grasp.
Here begins the story that shall entrust the thought of novelists surrounding me. Here begins the fathomless pit where nothing but my imagination and hand are at one.
I won't give it away this week. ;D
ReplyDeleteThough it's pretty obvious.
Hope I've improved sir.
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100 words and 150 syllables: spot on! Well done!!!
ReplyDeleteVery clever - in so many respects. Your choice of debut - a first novel - is original and skillfully done. Your description is dazzlingly original, and full of powerful and striking metaphor, many of which are truly exceptional. In fact, the whole effect is very special.
Well done!
If I were to be picky (and you know how I like to be picky), I would question some of your sentence structure: I have nothing against sentence fragments, but some of yours just seem a little incomplete. Oh, and I would swap 'shall' for 'will' ('shall' seems a little archaic).
Lastly, look again at the exact meaning of the verb 'entrust'. You can entrust something TO somebody - but I am not sure you can just entrust something.
:)