Exercise 1: Iambic Pentameters
Anaesthetised and numb by winds of cold
The chill and arctic temperatures you feel
When stepping out the door of oozing warmth
Living in a winter wonder
Snow fights, laughter, cosy fireside
Christmas time brings loads of presents
When it is winter I’m filled with joy
Looking outside watching children play
All the rain that it brings
All the snow and the ice
It’s so horrid and grim
Exercise 5:Quatrain; abab; iambic pentameters
A lot of people cry when summers gone
And moan and groan when winter shows its face.
So all day long they have the heating on.
In my opinion, I think winter’s ace.
When I look out my window the blanket of white
Seems to cover the street in full bloom.
I’m amazed and in awe and admire this sight
From the window in my cosy room
Hi Shingingstar
ReplyDeleteWell done for the perfect iambic and trochaic stanzas, I’m particularly impressed by ‘anaesthetised’ as an opening word.
The dactylic trimeters work well on the whole though the natural way of speaking them leads to wanting to stress the last word of each line, which obviously doesn’t work with the dactyl. The anapaestic dimeters are very good. The iambic quatrain is excellent metrically though you could possibly fiddle with the repetition ‘in my opinion I think’ because it says the same thing twice. The anapaestic quatrain is excellent and the rhymes and rhythm work really well. Much better than I managed! Well done.
Anjali
Thank you for your comment.
ReplyDeleteI will attempt th dactyl again and try to get it perfect next time.
It is good that you pointed out the "In my opinion I think" because I didn't realise that.
1, 2, 4 and 5 are brilliant. Well done you! :)
ReplyDelete3. Like paper scissors stone, I have a problem with this because "joy" and "play" appear in need of emphasis.
6. almost perfect - but I think you are perhaps stretching "admire" a little to make it three syllables...
Yeah looking back at it I see what you mean.I'm on the case though of fixing it and making it perfect.
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