Sunday, 13 May 2007

Eternity.Forever.

Someday I will be there shining,
Searching life so seeking dreams.
Every wish, no fantasising,
Lively future, rainbow colour-schemes.

SOMEday I will BE there SHINing,
SEARCHing LIFE so SEEKing DREAMS.
EVery WISH, no FANTaSISing,
LIVely FUture, RAINbow COLour-SCHEMES.

5 comments:

  1. Hopefully this poem's going to work.xDD

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  2. All perfectly trochaic. Well done!!! :)

    But...
    Only your last line is a pentameter.

    Line 1 = needs an extra 1 stressed syllable (i.e. the catalesis) to complete it for this task.
    Line 2 = needs an extra trochee before your concluding catalesis
    Line 3 = like Line 1, just needs a catalesis

    ALMOST there...

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  3. Oooo.
    I've got the perect one.
    Edit time. :D

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  4. 2nd Time lucky :)WELL DONE!!

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