(A young lady sits in her room)
(Sighs, looks down before beginning to talk) 5am that’s when ‘e goes to sleep... after the overdose of sleepin’ pills that is... 6am, guess what that is... that’s when ‘e wakes up (Laughs softly)। I never understood why they brought him ‘ere। (Roughly wipes an eye, voice rises) ‘E has no reason to be ‘ere। This damned place made him go nuts (Looks down in anger, Pause, sighs).
(Pushes against ears in anger) Arghhhh... (Gets up and shuts the door)
(Sits back down)I can’t bare the sound of his screams। I’ve been working ‘ere for the past 10 years; but I’ve never before felt the pain of another... never! I couldn’t...I mean... it was part of my job... to ‘ave no feelin’. (Puts head in hands)
I tried to get him out of ‘ere before it was much too late... I nearly lost my job but if that bothered me then I really ain’t human at all! I secretly let him listen to music from a Vinyl Player once in a while... but they caught me out of course।(Gets up, re-opens the door and sits back down)
(Looks at the door and slowly turns back) Another electric shock or dip in the water I guess... that’s all they ever do in this shithole... ‘Elp people? My foot! They never liked him... Who knows why... maybe it’s ‘cause he was always normal and they couldn’t face the fact that they turned him into a total nutcase!
My last attempt at helpin’ him was useless... (Shouts in anger) you know they tried to f***ing electrocute me! That’s how you know they’re the totally insane... (Calms down and wipes a tear) But I tried to ‘elp him... I honestly did; it’s just... they got to him before me। (Cries) You can guess what they did to him... I remember the day too well. Grey outside and grey in. I wasn’t allowed inside; they were afraid... they were afraid I would stop ‘em... (pauses, wipes a tear) stop ‘em from doin’ what they did.
I couldn’t... I was useless! (Cries & walks away)
Hi TeleTubbiez,
ReplyDeleteThis is still impressive work. It's a pleasure to read it again. It reminds me of a film / stage play called 'Quills,' which is set in an insane asylum at the turn of the 18th century. Very dark, troubling, and slightly gothic.
I am intrigued by the voice of this piece. What are her motivations? Why is she so interested in this one patient? Is she attracted to him? Do they have a history, or did she meet him only after he was admitted? I have lots of questions about the unseen man, too. Is he really mad? What sent him mad? Did he ask to listen to the music, and if so, why?
I think it's wonderful that you've managed to get me so involved in the monologue. It can be hard to get a reader or viewer interested, and I'm totally fascinated and drawn in! That just goes to show what a telented writer you are. Keep up the good work!
Helen
THANK YOU :D:D:D:D
ReplyDeleteThis is outstanding. But think how much more impressive still it could be if you thought about the questions Helen raises. You are writing with such skill and sophistication now - the difficult thing will be taking your writing to the next level. Don't stop experimenting and pushing yourself, as your talent is clearly very impressive indeed. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks sir, but can i do another re-draft???? u don't have to mark it i jus want to add the answers to Helen's questionzz :D:D
ReplyDeleteOf course you can! :)
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